Third Assigment: Commentate

Name : Sri Nurtika Sari (N1A514109)

Dear my beloved friend, Hartina Hamado. You have a nice descriptive about Uttaran drama, but in this moment I’ll give a comment about it. I realize I’m not the perfect people who can give you the suggest, because we’re in the same condition as a student who need more lessons and knowledge. So, Forgive me if I mark many incorrect sentences on your written, because I think it is for your progress in the future *peace*.  

“Popularity Of Uttaran Drama In Indonesia”

(by Hartina Hamado)

            Assalamualaikum readers, in this time we will work through about a drama that really popular in Indonesia on this year. That is Uttaran, a drama that comes from shah rhul khan (my husband) state, India. I think all of us have knew about it, yah, even I know some of you don’t really like these drama, shame with me, actually I don’t really like too these drama, the story of the drama too complicated, but I saw many people talk about Uttaran drama, so I think that will be interesting if we try to work through it. Thats why I choose it to be my topic now.

Utaran drama is one of the India  drama that ANTV present. These drama be present every day at afternoon, around 4 or 5 o’clock pm. Every afternoon, many people in Indonesia just watching this drama in ANTV. Uttaran drama is telling about an India woman and mans’ love story who live in a family of wealth  that really complicated.  India’s artist of the drama are very handsome and beautiful. ANTV Often invites them to come in Indonesia to amusing the people of Indonesia who loved their drama. Uttaran drama is the most favorite India drama that ANTV present in Indonesia.

            Uttaran drama is very popular in Indonesia. Almost all people in Indonesia know about that drama, neither kids, middle, until oldster, must be watched it , especially mothers, they are really enthusiastic of it. Even they didn’t watch those drama, I am sure, they know it. Whenever and wherever they are, they always talk about it even they are in a busy. Market, school, campus even in home Utaran drama always in the topic. Its because of the plot of each episode  is really interesting, the plot can raising an emotional everyone who watch that drama and make them be anxious to do or find out what will happen in the next episode.

            That’s all what I know about the popularity of Utaran drama in Indonesia. I don’t really know about the story of those drama, cause, u know, I’m just a student who live in the boarding room, there is no TV inside, so I hope u will understand.  I just know it from my mother and my other friend who like those drama. But, if you really wanna know about the Utaran drama story is, you can watch it on ANTV at afternoon. I hope we can share another drama in the next time. Thank you for reading…

My Comment and suggestion : 

1. “in this time we will work through about a drama that really popular in Indonesia on this year…”. In my of view, it will be better “in this time we will discuss about a drama which really popular in Indonesia this year…”
2. “a drama that comes from shah rhul khan (my husband) state, India”. You have to remember name of people should be started by capital letter: Shah Rhul Khan : “a drama that comes from Shah Rhul Khan (my husband) state, it is India” 
3. “I think all of us have knew about it” you may forgot if past participant of ‘know’ is ‘known’  
4. “shame with me”. You may forget ‘shame’ in Indonesia is ‘malu’, don’t forget dear, ‘shame’ and ‘same’ has different meaning   
5. “I don’t really like too these drama”. It will be better “I don’t really like these drama too” or “I’m also not really like these drama”  
6.  “the story of the drama too complicated”. This sentence has no a verb of auxiliary verb, it’ll be good “the story of the drama is very complicated” or “the story is very complicated” make it simple girl. I use ‘very’ because ‘complicated’ must be pairs with ‘very’ (collocation) 
   
7. “so I think that will be interesting if we try to work through it”. I think it’ll better if you use ‘discuss about it’ than ‘work through it’  
8. “Utaran drama is one of the India  drama that ANTV present. These drama be present every day at afternoon, around 4 or 5 o’clock pm.” For me ‘it is’ represent the word of  ‘These drama’, and the sentence should be “it is present for every day in the afternoon, about 4 or 5 o’clock pm.”  
9. "India’s artist of the drama are very handsome and beautiful”. It’ll good if the sentence become “the actors and actress of Uttaran drama are very handsome and beautiful”
10. “Even they didn’t watch those drama, I am sure, they know it. Whenever and wherever they are, they always talk about it even they are in a busy. Market, school, campus even in home Utaran drama always in the topic.”. You use ‘even’ for many times, and I’ve got confused with this sentences, I do not know what does the subject ‘they’ means here. Is ‘they’ for ‘kids, middle, until oldster’, or only for ‘people’ who didn’t watch the drama? If you mean ‘they’ for ‘people’ didn’t watch the drama, let see my sentence that I made for you “although some people didn’t watch this drama, I’m sure they know the plot. Whenever and wherever they are, people always talk about it even they were very busy. In the Market, school, campus or in the home Utaran drama always become the topic.”
11. “Its because of the plot” you may forgot to use apostrophe “ ’ ” between it and s.   
12. “..cause, u know..”. I think in writing we shouldn’t make a brief word such as ‘you’ become ‘u’.I It’ll be better if you make it completely “.. because, you know…” 
13. For me “if you really want to know about the story of Utaran drama” is better than “if you really wanna know about the Utaran drama story is”.

Uttaran Film

Sri Nurtika Sari ( N1A5 14 109 )

ANTV is a program TV that presents Indian film for the first time such as the phenomenal film last year ‘Mahabarata’. Success with that, ANTV tried to get audiences’ attention through another Indian film like ‘Mahadewa’, ‘Jodha Akbar’, ‘Mahaputra’, ‘Asoka’ ‘Baalveer’, etc. Through those, ANTV become famous program especially in Indonesia. Because of that popularity, there are many other program imitate to present Indian film too. Not only for the film above that has succeeded, in this very moment there is fairly famous Indian film which played every day. It is Uttaran film.

In Indonesia, Uttaran has taken the audiences’ attention to watch. It proved by ranking television program, in which Uttran film is always placed number 2 after ‘Anak Jalanan’ *according to @infoRatingTV*. In my point of view, Uttaran is the biggest film popular in Indonesia. It’s not only watched for the old, but also for the young too. So, when the afternoon comes, Uttaran is most film that people in search to watch.

Uttaran film is most involving Indian film I ever watch. Which the story told about friendship between two girls, it is Tinna Duta as Ica and Rashami Desai as Tapasya. They are like a siblings, because Ica lived in Tapasya’s house with her Mother as a housemaid. When they child, they are very close, but after adult their friendship becomes broke down because Tapasya is very egoist. Tapasya want to take Nandish Sandhu who plays as Veer from Ica. Veer is a man that Tapasya refused before. Tapasya become jealous to see Ica happy and Tapasya can do many things to get Veer back to her. That is a short story of Uttaran. It is very long to tell, there are many events happen in this film.

 

(Tinna Duta as Ica, Nandish Sandhu as Veer, Rashami Desai as Tapasya)

In my opinion, Uttaran has negative and positive impact for people. Uttaran has long time duration to watch, and I think it is very disturb of people activity because it’s played in the time when people very busy. On the other side I’m very interested with this film, because we can learn one thing from Indian, which the people really appreciated their culture through use their traditional cloth every day. It is positive to do. We have to follow their way, such as not spent our many times to watch film from another country. We should proud of Indonesian film itself, so Indonesia can increase many film into international. However the impact of this film, it is depend on people thought about it, isn’t that good to watch, or is it.

Don’t Watch This Program

Do you have an unoccupied time in a day? How do you spend your time if you have no activities more in a day? Are you staying in home? Or hang out? Many people maybe would answer this question to stay at home. So what people do in home? Are they cleaning? Studying? Playing games?  Listening music with the high speaker? Watching TV? Or just sleeping? Certainly the answer is depending to people’s mood, what they interested to do. Like myself, I usually watching TV to spend my time.

I can’t imagine if there is no TV in this world. Maybe now we just take a radio every time to be happy in home. For me, television is one of important electronic. TV gives us an information audio visual, not only used our ears to hear but our eyes to see the picture too. We can now directly the situation in everywhere without use our imagination to describe the situation like on the radio. I didn’t say TV is better than radio, radio is also important for low TV signal region. We should realize that in this term, we need a modern technology to make a progress. So, we didn’t out of the important information about anything. Not only for information, but TV is also for pleasure.

I’m the reality of people who used TV more for pleasure, but I’m still used it to know the hot news in this period. In Indonesia itself there are many TV channel. There are TVRI, SCTV, RCTI, Indosiar, Trans TV, Trans7, KompasTV, NET, etc. NET channel is one of my favorite, because NET is different from others channel. NET gives many programs that make me feel happy. Almost program in NET TV is comfortable. 

‘The Comment’ is the program in NET that I’m very like. First reason why I like it, it is the host, Imam Darto and Dimas Danang. They are the funny host couple for me. Even their joke is very fun, but I believe that they are the smart mans. I don’t know how to explain their smart, because their joke is make the audiences have to think fast and then respond fast, and they are different with other comedians I think. They always say in the end session “don’t watching this program, don’t watching this program” that is one thing that make funny. The second is they always present the funny picture and video from social media and the host will comment about that and of course they comment it with their funny style. Besides, they motivate audience to make a video creativity, and the participant will get a gift. The third reason is their music band with the name ‘the band’. The band is humorist too and I’m very like their jazz music with the instrument.  And the last is the guest. The guest always cool and famous and they also connect with Dimas and Danang joke. So, for me I couldn’t find it in other variety show.

‘The Comment’ is played on Monday to Friday at 12.00 a.m (Central Indonesia Time). Although it played very late night, ‘The Comment’ is still my favorite program. Don’t watch it.. hihihiii…